User talk:92.23.120.66

Writing Standards

Greetings! I've noticed you making various edits on Paper Mario-related articles, such as Shadow Sirens. However, I must tell you that you've been writing far too flowery. According to wiki rule, one must write in a simple, easy-to-understand syntax, and not as though they're attempting to write an epic. Thank you, and have a nice day. Doc von Schmeltwick (talk) 19:01, 9 September 2017 (EDT)

Must be some IP confusion, I haven't edited the Shadow Sirens article. 92.23.120.66 10:53, 10 September 2017 (EDT)

I believe he was referring to your edit on Ms. Mowz, which contained a lot of flowery writing. Please read MarioWiki:Good writing for more information. --TheFlameChomp (talk) 11:07, 10 September 2017 (EDT)

My edit to Ms Mowz contained no such flowery writing and significantly improved the article in several respects. It's likely that due to confusion with another IP the editor is being overzealous and not checking for consistency. Regardless, if another editor would like to highlight what he believes to be examples then he can bring them up in discussion. 92.23.120.66 11:10, 10 September 2017 (EDT)

I'm taking the time to read through the edits made by another to the Shadow Sirens page, and my suspicions prove correct. Although I wouldn't describe much of what that user added to the article as "flowery" at all, there's a lot of irrelevant detail added that doesn't develop the article. It bears no resemblance to the sole edit made by myself to Ms. Mowz's page.

I understand that IP confusion occurs, and skim reading and editing when trying to clearup happens and is forgiveable. 92.23.120.66 11:22, 10 September 2017 (EDT)

Regardless, you are edit warring, which will lead to a ban if it keeps up. Please discuss this with the other users involved. 11:26, 10 September 2017 (EDT)

An offer for a discussion has been extended in the edit notes of the page. No more edits or revertions have occurred within the following 24 minutes or so - I'll keep an eye on the page, and will assume the issue is resolved if neither a discussion nor another reversion occur. 92.23.120.66 11:35, 10 September 2017 (EDT)

Grubba

The rewrite template is mostly there for getting rid of flowery writing. I don't really see this with your edit, hence why I reverted it. Ray Trace^(T|C) 14:15, 11 September 2017 (EDT)

At first I thought you simply meant you undid my removal of the tag, which is okay. However on review you undid my entire edit, which I have since reverted given the improvement in writing standards and accuracy it brought to the article. No flowery language present, the text is plain and entirely in line with the game's contents. 92.23.120.66 11:00, 17 September 2017 (EDT)

Listen, no one wants to read all of that frill, it just makes people disinterested if they have to read through dramatic flair to get to the relevant information. "Eventually, Grubba's research bore fruit." That is a figure of speech, and as such has no place on here. "Affable Texan mannerisms." Just making something a bit more difficult for the masses to understand, nothing more. And resemblance to a Stone Spike? Minorly in that they're blue spikes, but should Kolorado's Wife be noted to look like Mad Koopa because they're both pinkish-orange-skinned Troopas? I don't think so. Good writing is straight to the point, and more importantly, easy for the masses to read. Thank you for your time. Doc von Schmeltwick (talk) 14:02, 17 September 2017 (EDT)

In terms of writing for MarioWiki, less is more, and if you can describe the same subject using less words, it's better for our readers and for our purpose. I also suggest you read this to get a better idea on what writing should be like on MarioWiki. Your revision is something I didn't find palatable, so I went ahead and rewrote this myself. Ray Trace^(T|C) 14:41, 17 September 2017 (EDT)

And the frill to which you refer being...? Every bit of content added to the article by my edits is relevant and accurate. My edits actually removed several items of redundant info, which I am prepared to search for as well if you so please, and further more many sentences prior to editing were, in the most direct sense, poor english diction. I challenge you, in all honestly, to itemise any changes you find otherwise. Out of respect from editor to another, I will entertain any and all specific disputes in the writing of the article and come to a meaningful understanding. The assertion that the edits constitute "flowery writing", by real standards, is one I will continue to find absurd until some evidence is forthwith. The other points you raise here are pure opinion. The idea that "research bore fruit" is in any way an unusual, difficult to parse or taxing statement is not one supported by any standard of writing. Common english idiom, in specific or in general, may not suit you personally, but you will find it in abundance in professionally written encyclopedia and historic accounts, and it absolutely fine here. I do not object to rewriting a sentence as that with "Eventually, Grubba's research had successful results" - but that replacement is *precisely the definition of overly-bloated language*, which actually is important to avoid. I could go on for examples like "affable" as a difficult word - last I checked this is not some obscure piece of jargon, antiquated or mystifying, but plain english. I'll note again the confusion of my edits with those of authors prior. The piece about resemblance to Stones was in the article before I ever editted it, myself having no aware of said enemy prior to clicking the link myself. I actually considered the comparison a little needless, but decided against removing it as it was ultimately fairly harmless. If you decide that you don't think it belongs, remove it, and next time do some research on how it entered the article before sundering your argument with incorrect claims. In closing this brief response, I will note the importance of comprehensiveness within the scale and scope of a given encyclopedic project. Concision is exactly as important as comprehension, and the two come together in a balance depending on the scale of the article. This is Super Mario Wiki. It is a specialty wiki designed to house all knowledge relevant to Mario as a video game series. Bear that in mind when advocating for "less is more", given the nature of detail that is relevant to its content. 92.23.120.66 15:16, 17 September 2017 (EDT)