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Mario and Luigi:Bowser's Inside Story is a more toward excellent(but decent)RPG.This one has its fans,but it would personally not be the game I want the most.Its a great game,and so I rate Mario and Luigi:Bowser's Inside Story an 8.5. | Mario and Luigi:Bowser's Inside Story is a more toward excellent(but decent)RPG.This one has its fans,but it would personally not be the game I want the most.Its a great game,and so I rate Mario and Luigi:Bowser's Inside Story an 8.5. | ||
[[File:Yoshistory2.png|30px]]'''[[User:Yoshitron|<span style="color:#27C32C">Yoshi</span>]][[User talk:Yoshitron|<span style="color:Silver">Tron</span>]]'''[[Image:Yoshitron.png]] 19:35, 18 September 2010 (UTC) | [[File:Yoshistory2.png|30px]]'''[[User:Yoshitron|<span style="color:#27C32C">Yoshi</span>]][[User talk:Yoshitron|<span style="color:Silver">Tron</span>]]'''[[Image:Yoshitron.png]] 19:35, 18 September 2010 (UTC) | ||
==Genius review== | ==Genius review== | ||
I like it. Your style could use some slight tweaking though. A). space after punctuation. . , : etc. B) Try writing it a bit more like an article. Go a bit more for details, rather than emotions. e.g. "THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST STORYLINES I HAVE EVER SEEN!" It could be improved to say: "This storyline was probably the best one I have ever seen!" Slight modifications make a good review amazing. And the only reason I'm not writing yet is because I haven't figured out where to write for. Back to the original point; your article is very good (I haven't played the game, so it's good to know how someone else likes it), but just add some more information (e.g. funniest quote) about it to make the article even better. {{User:Geniusguy445/sig}} | I like it. Your style could use some slight tweaking though. A). space after punctuation. . , : etc. B) Try writing it a bit more like an article. Go a bit more for details, rather than emotions. e.g. "THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST STORYLINES I HAVE EVER SEEN!" It could be improved to say: "This storyline was probably the best one I have ever seen!" Slight modifications make a good review amazing. And the only reason I'm not writing yet is because I haven't figured out where to write for. Back to the original point; your article is very good (I haven't played the game, so it's good to know how someone else likes it), but just add some more information (e.g. funniest quote) about it to make the article even better. {{User:Geniusguy445/sig}} |