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Thanks for listening and please post any complaints about my rewrite. {{User:Stumpers/sig}} 17:12, 20 January 2009 (EST) | Thanks for listening and please post any complaints about my rewrite. {{User:Stumpers/sig}} 17:12, 20 January 2009 (EST) | ||
:I actually like the Physical Description section because it compares Grubba to other Clubbas and Tubba Blubba, something that is not obvious from the picture (they may not know what either one looks like). It should stay. And the only "POV" we can really include is claims made by Goombella or other characters in the game - essentially, how other characters view Grubba. -- {{User|Son of Suns}} |
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Grubba
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- Stooben Rooben (talk) -- An extremely detailed article that contains a long biography on Grubba, as well as a "Powers and Abilities" section for when he transforms into Macho Grubba. The personality section describes how Grubba first appears as well as the side-effects of what his shallowness did to him. It also contains a fair amount of images, as well as good intro.
- Luigifreak (talk) Wow. This is a great article for being in just one game- a series of great articles too (articles like Gus.)
- Mario3v (talk) per all, this is a very good idea k.
- Bloc Partier (talk) - Once again, Stoobs does not fail to blow me away. Congrats for a great article!
- Super-Yoshi (talk) This article is just epic. Great job St00by!
- SolarBlaze (talk) Yes, I agree. This article is very well-written. Especially the personality part. You described Grubba's personality a lot better than I did. Nice job.
- Dom (talk) - I totally did some massive edits on this article. And Stooben rewrote most of it, which is why it's good, as it's been Stoobified.
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- Thanks for the compliments, guys, I really appreciate them! :D — Stooben Rooben 21:54, 17 January 2009 (EST)
This is a wonderful article. I have several questions/comments, and depending on the answers, minor changes to the article may be required.
- In the background section, there is no mention of the power draining machine until it is used on Prince Mush. If I didn't know the story of the game, I would be very confused. It just appeared out of the blue in the article. It should be mentioned earlier in the article where this machine came from, or at least that it existed.
- The article says that Grubba gave Mario a thirty coin gift for unknown reasons. I always thought it was a bonus for Mario reaching the Major Leagues (like a company bonus). Am I totally off-base or is there evidence to support my idea?
- What does the "Double Attack?" column in the Powers and Abilities section mean? That should be explained in that short paragraph prior to the chart.
- Could you explain the "slight arm movement" topic in the Physical Appearance section? I'm not sure what you are trying to get at...
- And from the Trivia section...what's a "Grubber?"
-- Son of Suns (talk)
- Well, since I'm the one who added that, I guess I could go ahead and explain. "Grubber" has many meanings, and among all those meanings is a slang term, which means to "eat" or "feed", and that's most likely referring to the fact that Grubba would "snack" on other peoples' energy (as he worded it when he transformed into Macho Grubba).
-- SolarBlaze (talk)
Since SolarBlaze was kind enough to answer the fifth point, I'll answer the other four.
- I looked through my game guide again and found two tiny sentences that roughly explained the origins of the power-sucking machine. Hopefully I did okay at writing that.
- I apologize for that. I own both a glitched version of the game — which contains alternate text, battle sequences, and textures than the regular version — and the original version. I got the text between the two mixed up, so you are right about it being a gift for making it into the major league. It wasn't a company bonus, but it was a sort of encouraging gift provided by Grubba.
- "Double Attack" is an official term referring to an enemy being able to attack both Mario and his partner in one shot. I added a brief note under the table explaining the term, in case anyone doesn't know what it means.
- To be completely honest, I have no idea why I put that there. Then again, I was editing that at around 4:00am, so that probably explains it. :P
— Stooben Rooben 03:16, 18 January 2009 (EST)
Wow this met requierments in 1 day? Luigfreak Mai talk
- Thanks.
- Thanks.
- Thanks.
- Okay, I was actually referring to that whole paragraph about the arm movement. I'm not sure why that topic needs to be mentioned.
- Thanks.
=) -- Son of Suns (talk)
Lol, Stooben you were writing about how good the article is and I chuckled for obvious reasons. (But it certainly is very good) »»
I don't want to oppose and remove the FA status, but here's several complaints: much of the story is told from Mario's limited point of view, not including the backstory. Too much detail is given to Mario. Instead of focusing on Mario's actions, we should be focusing on Grubba's, like noting that Grubba is implied to have sent the threat to Mario, incapacitated Andy and that other fighter, and so on. We should also reveal Jolene's intentions from the get-go. There's a problem with the writing style that is sort of hand-in-hand: it's written like a story rather than an encyclopedia. Also, shouldn't the abilities of Macho Grubba go solely on Macho Grubba's page? On this page, I would think we'd want to just say, "Grubba is physically weak due to old age without the assistance of his power-sucking machine. However, with the machine he can transform into Macho Grubba, who has a variety of powers and abilities at his disposal." Stumpers! 15:05, 19 January 2009 (EST)
- The focus given on Mario is, (to me, at least), still giving a heavy amount of focus on Grubba's actions. Like, the sentence explaining when Mario made it to Champion status, it says that he was stationed in the Champ's room that day; directly afterwards, it explains how he is directed by "X" to go find the ghost in the room — which is actually Grubba talking in his office. That sentence explains that Grubba, while talking to himself, was overheard, which lead to his secret being discovered. While I do admit that many sentences show focus on Mario, they explain his perspective of Grubba's actions, since Grubba's perspective is never seen. About the "Powers & Abilities", I like your example. It could explain how Grubba has no power in his normal state, and then could have a link saying, "for more information, see here". The "here" would link to a section of Macho Grubba's article explaining his powers and abilities. — Stooben Rooben 21:10, 19 January 2009 (EST)
Stumpers' List o' Woes
- We need tattle data for him. Otherwise, we should put on a "tattle data needed" tag, and thus the article cannot be featured.
- Currently, the physical description section does not offer any information that cannot be glazed from looking at the artwork at the top of the article. Unless someone protests, I'll remove it.
- The personality section makes claims about Grubba having paranoia - something that he did not have. He was actually very level headed throughout. It also gets POV when saying that Grubba was a "good guy." Yes, he is jovial and kindly so long as you don't get in his way, BUT... I hardly think it is our place to say whether a character is a good guy when they are an antagonist to the series' "good guy," Mario.
Thanks for listening and please post any complaints about my rewrite. Stumpers! 17:12, 20 January 2009 (EST)
- I actually like the Physical Description section because it compares Grubba to other Clubbas and Tubba Blubba, something that is not obvious from the picture (they may not know what either one looks like). It should stay. And the only "POV" we can really include is claims made by Goombella or other characters in the game - essentially, how other characters view Grubba. -- Son of Suns (talk)