User talk:Xzelion/Story Archive

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Xzelion^ETC

I missed some parts, and now I've read them they're awesome. (I didn't know what issue to comment on, so I left it here, if that's fine.)  Caps Lock LORD 15:26, 6 May 2007 (EDT)

Reviews/Comments/Issue1

Awesome!-- Aipom -- awesome!

What's sorta ironic... I do watch the sunset and eat Vinilla Ice Cream, and I'm freinds with HK Max2 (talk)

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

That story is supreme in every way I can think of!!!! The plot, dialogue and descriptions were amazing! The only thing that was confusing was that who was speaking was sometimes unclear (you probably forgot that in this Wiki, you have to press enter twice). There were some typos, but who cares aobut that anyway. Wow, and I'm one of the main characters, was it because I welcomed you? I hope SPL can overcome his fear to save me.... I rate it 50/10 :') (crying of joy because of the great story) ^{Plumber, darkgreen}

Great, great, great, great story.Plumber pretty much summed up the good and bad of your fanfic. Can I be in it? User:Gofer

Pure Gold. 5 Crystal Stars. *****<---Crystal Stars. Best portrayal of me yet.HK47, .

Very nice, I love it. --KPH2293 00:57, 17 March 2007 (EDT)

Reviews/Comments/Issue2

Even better, plus ME!-- Aipom --

Wow, you have succeeded in making it even better than before, something I thought was impossible. What does Isyou look like, anyway?^{Plumber, darkgreen}

I loved it, it has the BEST details. Isyou 19:02, 16 March 2007 (EDT)

Good,but I don't like it as much as chapter 1.The action part were a bit confusing. User:Gofer

To repeat what I said in the Issue 1 section: Very nice, I love it. You gave me a nice role, too. Can't wait for the next issue! --KPH2293 00:57, 17 March 2007 (EDT)

DUDE, U R TEH AWESOMENESS. THAT PWNED. All it needs is ME! :P Nah, not really. Still, sweet in all ways I can think of. Try to improve grammer, though. 3D, make me drink MOUNTAIN DEW!

Awesome! 1 thing wrong: I'm a total Chicken (bawwk bawwkkk!) Max2 (talk)

Reviews/Comments/Issue3

I liked it! I hope you make more! Full Metal Moogle

Wow... it keeps getting better and better. You rock! ^{Plumber, darkgreen}

Great,Great,GREAT!The portrayal of the alien is not very Metalslug'ish,but oh well.Still awesome. User:Gofer

And I'm in it, too! Yay! I'm a cool army-type guy! Anyway, the stories are great. You've sure got some writin' skillz... --YellowYoshi398 08:14, 23 March 2007 (EDT)

Reviews/Comments/Issue4

I loved it! You have a real tallant! Full Metal Moogle

Pure brillance, but I have a little reserve against my character dialogue, when Plumber landed Mario97 hat to Gofer, he should have said something among the line of 'Who name their son 'Mario97'? I bet he was an idiot, anyway.'Just my two cent. User:Gofer

You have a real talent for writing. That was great! ^{Plumber, darkgreen}

Reviews/Comments/Issue5

That was the best one ever! I can see how Mario97 is turning into a Captain Olimar-type guy. And Wayoshi pwned. ^Plumber

I admit I'm impressed by this in total. Nice work. Wa _T^C_@^Y 20:09, 7 April 2007 (EDT)

Reviews/Comments/Issue6

Woohoo! Wow! Amazing! Wait, the three man mission didn't happen yet, right? Unless it's Ultimatetoadette, Arend and Fg. Great cliffhanger at the end too. ^{Plumber, darkgreen}

Cool, but a bit short, and I'm not in it. Gofer

Reviews/Comments/Issue7

A-MA-ZING!You made my character a big a****** like I wanted him to be!The only thing I did'nt like is that I am a prince, I thought something in the line of 'Supreme Commander of the invasion force'.The chapter could have been a bit longer, and it could definitely used some humor.Keep up the good work! Gofer

They keep getting better, and better, and better, and better.... ^{Plumber, darkgreen}

Reviews/Comments/Issue8

Hhhhmmmm... Much shorter than I expected (unless it's just the first part), still, epic as ever! But, who are the "Odam"? Are these guy a made-up faction or what? It is just me, or your grammar and spelling skill have improved? Where are the Bacterions?

Amamamamazing! And the result of the poll is cool. ^Plumber

Reviews/Comments/Issue9

LOL, Bean was thought to be a sysop! And the plot keeps getting better and better... ^{Plumber, darkgreen}

Good, I've noticed less spelling and gramatical mistakes. I think you could add more description (what does that earthpound thing look like?). I like the way you handled the appearance of the Bacterion's Empire, instead of throwing it all in one chapter, you take it slow and soft... I like that. Gofer

Reviews/Comments/Issue12

Nice job, suspenseful. Makes me want more. Again, five crystal stars. *****<----Crystal Stars.Saudy^Talk!