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This where everyone can write reviews and comments, Thanks ahead of time for the reviews and commets. 

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==Reviews/Comments/Issue1==
Awesome!--{{User:Aipom/sig}}--
awesome! 

What's sorta ironic... I do watch the sunset and eat Vinilla Ice Cream, and I'm freinds with HK {{user:maxlover2/sig|not for 4 years, though.}}

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

That story is supreme in every way I can think of!!!! The plot, dialogue and descriptions were amazing! The only thing that was confusing was that who was speaking was sometimes unclear (you probably forgot that in this Wiki, you have to press enter twice). There were some typos, but who cares aobut that anyway. Wow, and I'm one of the main characters, was it because I welcomed you? I hope SPL can overcome his fear to save me.... I rate it 50/10 :') (crying of joy because of the great story) {{User:Plumber/sig|Lola Bubbles}}

Great, great, great, great story.Plumber pretty much summed up the good and bad of your fanfic. Can I be in it?
[[User:Gofer]]

Pure Gold. 5 Crystal Stars. *****<---Crystal Stars. Best portrayal of me yet.[[User:HK-47|<span style="font-Family:font; color:Black;">H</span>]][[User talk:HK-47|<span style="font-Family:font; color:Red;">K</span>]][[Special: Recent Changes|<span style="font-Family:font; color:Black;">4</span>]][[User:HK-47/sig|<span style="font-Family:font; color:Red;">7</span>]], [[Special:Random|<span style="font-Family:font; color:Purple;">{{{1|.}}}</span>]]
:Very nice, I love it. --{{User:Yoshi626/sig}} 00:57, 17 March 2007 (EDT)

==Reviews/Comments/Issue2==
Even better, plus ME!--{{User:Aipom/sig}}--

Wow, you have succeeded in making it even better than before, something I thought was impossible. What does Isyou look like, anyway?{{User:Plumber/sig|And I come back!}}

I loved it, it has the BEST details. [[User:Isyou|Isyou]] 19:02, 16 March 2007 (EDT)

Good,but I don't like it as
much as chapter 1.The action part were a bit confusing.
[[User:Gofer]]
:To repeat what I said in the Issue 1 section: Very nice, I love it. You gave me a nice role, too. Can't wait for the next issue! --{{User:Yoshi626/sig}} 00:57, 17 March 2007 (EDT)
::DUDE, U R TEH AWESOMENESS. THAT PWNED. All it needs is ME! :P Nah, not really. Still, sweet in all ways I can think of. Try to improve grammer, though. {{User:3dejong/sig|make me drink MOUNTAIN DEW!}}

Awesome! 1 thing wrong: I'm a total Chicken (bawwk bawwkkk!) {{User:maxlover2/sig|still good. 9/10}}

==Reviews/Comments/Issue3==
I liked it! I hope you make more! {{User:isyou/sig}}

Wow... it keeps getting better and better. You rock! {{User:Plumber/sig|Thanks for devoting you talk page to me and saying I should be a sysop.}}

Great,Great,GREAT!The portrayal of the alien is not very Metalslug'ish,but oh well.Still awesome.
[[User:Gofer]]

:And I'm in it, too! Yay! I'm a cool army-type guy! Anyway, the stories are great. You've sure got some writin' skillz... --[[User:YellowYoshi398|YellowYoshi398]] 08:14, 23 March 2007 (EDT)

==Reviews/Comments/Issue4==
I loved it! You have a real tallant! {{User:isyou/sig}}

Pure brillance, but I have a little reserve against my character dialogue, when Plumber landed Mario97 hat to Gofer, he should have said something among the line of 'Who name their son 'Mario97'? I bet he was an idiot, anyway.'Just my two cent.
[[User:Gofer]]

You have a real talent for writing. That was great! {{User:Plumber/sig|Untendo is at Wikia with UnMarioWiki now.}}

==Reviews/Comments/Issue5==
That was the best one ever! I can see how Mario97 is turning into a Captain Olimar-type guy. And Wayoshi pwned. {{User:Plumber/sig}}
:I admit I'm impressed by this in total. Nice work. {{User:Wayoshi/sig}} 20:09, 7 April 2007 (EDT)

I think it's funny how one of the charecters defeated 3,000 mars people.{{User:Lario/sig}}

He didn't they teleported out of there...their mission was complete...
[[User:Great Gonzo|Great Gonzo]]

==Reviews/Comments/Issue6==
Woohoo! Wow! Amazing! Wait, the three man mission didn't happen yet, right? Unless it's Ultimatetoadette, Arend and Fg. Great cliffhanger at the end too. {{User:Plumber/sig|Max, that pan left a bump!}}

Cool, but a bit short, and I'm not in it.
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-I missed some parts, and now I've read them they're awesome. (I didn't know what issue to comment on, so I left it here, if that's fine.) {{User:Smiddle/sig}} 15:26, 6 May 2007 (EDT)
-Can I be in this? I've read it, and it's awesome. I don't know why I didn't read it sooner.{{User:Purple Yoshi/sig}}
-Wait a second...*giggles* I was in it without even knowing! Thanks so much{{User:Purple Yoshi/sig}}
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 That was the best one ever! I can see how Mario97 is turning into a Captain Olimar-type guy. And Wayoshi pwned. {{User:Plumber/sig}}
 :I admit I'm impressed by this in total. Nice work. {{User:Wayoshi/sig}} 20:09, 7 April 2007 (EDT)
+I think it's funny how one of the charecters defeated 3,000 mars people.{{User:Lario/sig}}
+He didn't they teleported out of there...their mission was complete...
+[[User:Great Gonzo|Great Gonzo]]
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 Cool, but a bit short, and I'm not in it.
 [[User:Gofer|Gofer]]
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-A-MA-ZING!You made my character a big a****** like I wanted him to be!The only thing I did'nt like is that I am a prince, I thought something in the line of 'Supreme Commander of the invasion force'.The chapter could have been a bit longer, and it could definitely used some humor.Keep up the good work!
-[[User:Gofer|Gofer]]
-They keep getting better, and better, and better, and better.... {{User:Plumber/sig|...and better....}}
-==Reviews/Comments/Issue8==
-Hhhhmmmm... Much shorter than I expected (unless it's just the first part), still, epic as ever! But, who are the "Odam"? Are these guy a made-up faction or what? It is just me, or your grammar and spelling skill have improved?
-[[User:Gofer|Where are the Bacterions?]]
-Amamamamazing! And the result of the poll is cool. {{User:Plumber/sig}}
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-LOL, Bean was thought to be a sysop! And the plot keeps getting better and better... {{User:Plumber/sig|When will the next one be out?}}
-Good, I've noticed less spelling and gramatical mistakes. I think you could add more description (what does that earthpound thing look like?). I like the way you handled the appearance of the Bacterion's Empire, instead of throwing it all in one chapter, you take it slow and soft... I like that.
-[[User:Gofer|Gofer]]
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-Nice job, suspenseful. Makes me want more. Again, five crystal stars. *****<----Crystal Stars.{{User:HK-47/sig}}
-Sounds cool. You should be a VG creator with your vast amounts of creativity.{{User:Knife/sig}} 15:30, 7 June 2007 (EDT)
-Kewl, but I thought SM97 was supposed to die without his suit.
-[[User:Gofer|That portrayal of Smiddle was hilarious.]]
-BEST...ONE....YET.....EVER........22:51, 8 June 2007 (EDT)