Editing User talk:128.201.218.57

== Grammar ==

Hey, thank you for your edits! I noticed you were having some trouble, so here's some tips to work on:
*You aren't using proper punctuation, instead just letting the sentence run on or just not end. Instead of "When Luigi enters the Laboratories the normal mansion theme starts playing. If Luigi capture all ghosts in a room, the bonus mission music starts playing again", it should be: <code>When Luigi enters the [[Laboratories]], the normal mansion theme starts playing. If Luigi capture all the ghosts in a room, the bonus mission music starts playing again.</code> The wording could be improved, but getting the punctuation right would be a big help. In this case, you forgot the commas and final period.
*"This is the only bonus mission to happen this." is not good grammar. "This is the only bonus mission where this occurs." works better.
*Make sure to double-check your spelling. If your browser has spellcheck, it'll let you know when it catches something with red lines under the words. For example, you had "Gradual Infiltration" as "Gradual Infitration", missing the L.
*Two of your edits conflicted with each other, this one on [[Special:Diff/3259717|Metal Mario Cup]] and this one on [[Special:Diff/3259719|Iggy Cup]]. They can't both be the longest time without a reappearance if they have two different time spans. I deleted the Metal Mario Cup one, but feel free to offer a clarification.
If you have something you're not quite figuring out, let me or another active member know, or view our [[Help:Contents|help pages]]. Thank you and keep contributing. {{User:Alex95/sig}} 17:30, August 24, 2021 (EDT)

Regarding that last point, make sure you do double-check the in-game content, [[List of tours in Mario Kart Tour|relevant pages]] and your own edits before adding such facts to pages, since I've noticed you've done that a number of times and it can accidentally present misleading/false information. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 21:39, August 24, 2021 (EDT)

Please check over your edits and correct any mistakes before leaving them when you're doing code-heavy edits. If you need to, use the "Show preview" button next to the "Save changes" button; this lets you see what your edit looks like before saving them. If you're not sure what's causing a mistake, remove the edit and ask for assistance.

Remember to also add spaces before opening parentheses (like this) and not(like this). {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 23:50, August 24, 2021 (EDT)

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Your grammar still needs some work. [[Special:Diff/3260561|This sentence in particular]] is poorly written because you're combining everything into a single sentence into a {{wp|run-on sentence}}, which doesn't make sense and makes it hard to read. "After that" and "However" mark the start of new sentences, so in cases like this, use periods to make separate sentences. Make sure to not use periods where commas should be used, like you did [[Special:Diff/3260519|here]]. Regarding verbs for subjects, remember to use singular verbs for multiple subjects, and plural verbs for one subject (e.g. "A Greenie '''sees''' Luigi", not "A Greenie '''see''' Luigi", and "Greenies '''see''' Luigi", not "Greenies '''sees''' Luigi"). Don't take this as discouraging you from editing entirely, but please try to take the time to improve your grammar before making text-heavy edits like these. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 21:58, August 25, 2021 (EDT)
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 Your grammar still needs some work. [[Special:Diff/3260561|This sentence in particular]] is poorly written because you're combining everything into a single sentence into a {{wp|run-on sentence}}, which doesn't make sense and makes it hard to read. "After that" and "However" mark the start of new sentences, so in cases like this, use periods to make separate sentences. Make sure to not use periods where commas should be used, like you did [[Special:Diff/3260519|here]]. Regarding verbs for subjects, remember to use singular verbs for multiple subjects, and plural verbs for one subject (e.g. "A Greenie '''sees''' Luigi", not "A Greenie '''see''' Luigi", and "Greenies '''see''' Luigi", not "Greenies '''sees''' Luigi"). Don't take this as discouraging you from editing entirely, but please try to take the time to improve your grammar before making text-heavy edits like these. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 21:58, August 25, 2021 (EDT)
-You did this again on [[The Pinwheel Gate]]; please don't use periods where you're supposed to use commas ("that the Hiders stole and hid''',''' similar to...", not "that the Hiders stole and hid'''.''' similar to..."), and words after periods should be capitalised [[User talk:128.201.219.34|as you were already told]]. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 22:35, August 25, 2021 (EDT)
-Recall what I said above regarding plural verbs for singular subjects. e.g. "When the player step on a button" and "When the player land on Bowser Space" - Since it's ''one'' player, use "steps" and "lands", not "step" and "land". Also, make sure to use {{wp|determiner}}s where necessary ("Bowser Space" should be "a Bowser Space"). Please try to double-check your edits for other errors as well (like [[Special:Diff/3411974|this]], where you wrote "was is" instead of "was the"); I suggest looking through your past edits to see what fixes were made or similar texts on other articles to understand the grammar a bit more, or consider using a grammar checker for your edits. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 01:09, September 11, 2021 (EDT)
-When I say look at other articles for examples, that doesn't mean [https://www.ign.com/wikis/mario-party-8/Basics_part_3 simply copying and pasting from another website] without attribution or even fixing the writing to match the wiki's [[MarioWiki:Manual of Style#No "you"s|proper writing style]]. Don't do this again, as this is considered plagiarism. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 22:57, September 13, 2021 (EDT)
-Spaces do not go after opening parentheses (like this) not ( like this). {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 01:54, September 14, 2021 (EDT)
-Don't use "he" when referring to the player. Not all players are male, so use "they". {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 23:07, September 14, 2021 (EDT)
-When you're writing sentences like "If the CPU Minigames option is off, will show instead of skipping." and "In other boards, is replaced by other events." you need to specify a subject after the comma (what will show, and what was replaced).
-*"If the CPU Minigames option is off, '''the minigame''' will show instead of skipping." and "In other boards, '''the event''' is replaced by other events."
-Or if it's already mentioned, just use "it":
-*"If the CPU Minigames option is off, '''it''' will show instead of skipping." and "In other boards, '''it''' is replaced by other events." {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 00:44, September 16, 2021 (EDT)
-== Titles ==
-Per [[MarioWiki:Manual of Style#Italicizing titles]], remember to format game titles in ''italics'' (e.g. [[Mario Party 7]] should be written as ''[[Mario Party 7]]''). {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 21:31, September 12, 2021 (EDT)
-== Multiple accounts ==
-Please stop creating multiple accounts; you've created {{user|8ca}} and {{user|Ck9}} already, so if you want to edit while registered, you need to stick with one. You also just logged into an old account {{user|Caio}} a few weeks ago to send emails, so you shouldn't be creating new accounts anyway, as having multiple accounts is not allowed. Excessive account creation will result in a block from editing entirely. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 02:30, September 16, 2021 (EDT)
-== Second-person writing / trivia ==
-Don't use the word "you" or "your" on articles. When you're referring to the player, "the player", "they" etc. or the character's name should be used instead. Please read over the [[MarioWiki:Manual of Style|Manual of Style]].
-Also, consider reading through [[MarioWiki:Trivia]] before adding trivia points to the article. {{User:Mario jc/sig}} 21:31, September 16, 2021 (EDT)