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| This article should be rewritten like the rest of the other articles for the other courses in Super Mario 64 and its remake. [[Shifting Sand Land|Here]] is an example of how the article should look like. [[User:TheUnknown67|-TheUnknown67]] ([[User talk:TheUnknown67|talk]]) 19:29, 22 June 2016 (EDT) | | This article should be rewritten like the rest of the other articles for the other courses in Super Mario 64 and its remake. [[Shifting Sand Land|Here]] is an example of how the article should look like. [[User:TheUnknown67|-TheUnknown67]] ([[User talk:TheUnknown67|talk]]) 19:29, 22 June 2016 (EDT) |
| :[http://www.mariowiki.com/index.php?title=Talk:Bob-omb_Battlefield&diff=2003565&oldid=2003550 No.] {{User:Bazooka Mario/sig}} 20:07, 22 June 2016 (EDT) | | :[http://www.mariowiki.com/index.php?title=Talk:Bob-omb_Battlefield&diff=2003565&oldid=2003550 No.] {{User:Bazooka Mario/sig}} 20:07, 22 June 2016 (EDT) |
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| == "Like in that course" phrasing in lead ==
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| I altered the phrasing in a section of lead from "like in that course" to "similar to that course", then it was immediately [https://www.mariowiki.com/index.php?title=Jolly_Roger_Bay&diff=next&oldid=3972531 reverted back]. I very strongly believe starting a sentence with "like in" rather than using another phrase (such as "similar to" or "as in") or alternatively joining the two sentences, is unclear and unprofessional. I would like some others' opinions on the matter, thanks. [[User:Dishwasher|Dishwasher]] ([[User talk:Dishwasher|talk]]) 01:40, August 7, 2023 (EDT)
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| :If the sentence were to start with "similar to that course," the subject following that phrase would need to be the course that phrase is referring to, not the course's music. Otherwise, the sentence would say that the course's music is similar to the first mentioned course, which would be grammatically incorrect. [[User:Dwhitney|Dwhitney]] ([[User talk:Dwhitney|talk]]) 02:10, August 7, 2023 (EDT)
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| ::How's "as in", then. [[User:Dishwasher|Dishwasher]] ([[User talk:Dishwasher|talk]]) 02:15, August 7, 2023 (EDT)
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| :::Probably not, but maybe "similarly to" would work. [[User:Dwhitney|Dwhitney]] ([[User talk:Dwhitney|talk]]) 11:26, August 7, 2023 (EDT)
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| ::::"Similarly to" suggests the courses' music/music mechanics are "similar" between themselves rather than one and the same. "As in that course, [this course]" is more clear. [[User:Dishwasher|Dishwasher]] ([[User talk:Dishwasher|talk]]) 18:32, August 7, 2023 (EDT)
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