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#{{User|GreenDisaster}} There are two things that immediately stand out to me: one is that the section on ''Super Mario-Kun'' (you forgot a hyphen there) does not inform the reader on what role Baby Mario actually plays in the comic. The other is that the cameos section lists games where Baby Mario does not make a notable appearance, even though pretty much every other article has individual sections for each of these games, and articles that do have a cameos section use it for listing a character's appearance in non-first-party games. The intro to the article also feels rather off to me, especially with the "created to be Mario as an infant" line. It just doesn't sound right. However, I think my biggest problem with the article is the overall style of writing. There are numerous sections and lines that I don't think go very well in the kind of articles that we want to have, such as in the ''Touch & Go'' section, with "Baby Mario rides Yoshi's back in the spin-off Nintendo DS game Yoshi Touch & Go" (unnecessary introduction), "Every mode starts similar to Super Mario World 2: Yoshi's Island with Kamek knocking Baby Mario off the Stork and taking Baby Luigi captive" (doesn't give context on these modes), in the ''Mario Golf'' section, with "In result, he is the strongest of all the default characters, yet he is the fourth weakest in the entire game" (seems overly specific), in the ''Mario Tennis Open'' section, with "After four years of absence regarding playability" (seems unnecessary), and I haven't even read the whole article yet. Another major problem is the inclusion of details that are either unnecessary in the covering of Baby Mario or stray from focusing on Baby Mario himself. "After defeating him, Kamek uses his power to make Baby Bowser very large", "[Baby Luigi] is saved by Yoshi and Baby Mario", "Bowser orders Kamek to kidnap the babies because with their combined power, Bowser is able to take over the universe", "[The Baby Mario and Yoshi Court] is mainly for speed characters, since it has the fastest ball speed, but a weak bounce", half of the section covering ''Mario Tennis (Game Boy Color)'' goes over the minigame named after Baby Mario, the ''Mario Kart DS'' section focuses more on Baby Park, and again, haven't read the whole article yet. If I can find all of these problems in the first half of the article, do you think that the second half is any better? | #{{User|GreenDisaster}} There are two things that immediately stand out to me: one is that the section on ''Super Mario-Kun'' (you forgot a hyphen there) does not inform the reader on what role Baby Mario actually plays in the comic. The other is that the cameos section lists games where Baby Mario does not make a notable appearance, even though pretty much every other article has individual sections for each of these games, and articles that do have a cameos section use it for listing a character's appearance in non-first-party games. The intro to the article also feels rather off to me, especially with the "created to be Mario as an infant" line. It just doesn't sound right. However, I think my biggest problem with the article is the overall style of writing. There are numerous sections and lines that I don't think go very well in the kind of articles that we want to have, such as in the ''Touch & Go'' section, with "Baby Mario rides Yoshi's back in the spin-off Nintendo DS game Yoshi Touch & Go" (unnecessary introduction), "Every mode starts similar to Super Mario World 2: Yoshi's Island with Kamek knocking Baby Mario off the Stork and taking Baby Luigi captive" (doesn't give context on these modes), in the ''Mario Golf'' section, with "In result, he is the strongest of all the default characters, yet he is the fourth weakest in the entire game" (seems overly specific), in the ''Mario Tennis Open'' section, with "After four years of absence regarding playability" (seems unnecessary), and I haven't even read the whole article yet. Another major problem is the inclusion of details that are either unnecessary in the covering of Baby Mario or stray from focusing on Baby Mario himself. "After defeating him, Kamek uses his power to make Baby Bowser very large", "[Baby Luigi] is saved by Yoshi and Baby Mario", "Bowser orders Kamek to kidnap the babies because with their combined power, Bowser is able to take over the universe", "[The Baby Mario and Yoshi Court] is mainly for speed characters, since it has the fastest ball speed, but a weak bounce", half of the section covering ''Mario Tennis (Game Boy Color)'' goes over the minigame named after Baby Mario, the ''Mario Kart DS'' section focuses more on Baby Park, and again, haven't read the whole article yet. If I can find all of these problems in the first half of the article, do you think that the second half is any better? | ||
#{{user|Tucayo}} - As GreenDisaster said, the ''Super Mario-Kun'' section needs expanding. <s>And the '''Gallery''' header is empty as per the [[MarioWiki:Empty | #{{user|Tucayo}} - As GreenDisaster said, the ''Super Mario-Kun'' section needs expanding. <s>And the '''Gallery''' header is empty as per the [[MarioWiki:Empty Section Policy|Empty Section Policy]].</s> | ||
#{{User|Marshal Dan Troop}} Super Mario-Kun may be based mostly off the games but the fact is that there are differences and those differences need to be mentioned in the article otherwise the article is lacking information relevant to the character. Also obscurity is not a good reason to feature and article which lacks info. | #{{User|Marshal Dan Troop}} Super Mario-Kun may be based mostly off the games but the fact is that there are differences and those differences need to be mentioned in the article otherwise the article is lacking information relevant to the character. Also obscurity is not a good reason to feature and article which lacks info. | ||
#{{User|Baby Mario Bloops}} - I love Baby Mario, but...ugh, the page still needs much work. I understand that many sections really cannot be expanded much more, but basically per Reversinator. Most of the sections are just a description of Baby Mario in that game, and nothing else. I mean, I know there really isn't much you can add, but there are some sections that I know can have a few things added to it without it just being filler. | #{{User|Baby Mario Bloops}} - I love Baby Mario, but...ugh, the page still needs much work. I understand that many sections really cannot be expanded much more, but basically per Reversinator. Most of the sections are just a description of Baby Mario in that game, and nothing else. I mean, I know there really isn't much you can add, but there are some sections that I know can have a few things added to it without it just being filler. | ||
