Editing MarioWiki:Featured articles/N1/Wario Land 4

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|nominated=1:12, 4 October 2012
|lastedit=4:31, 1 December 2012
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==== Support ====
#{{User|YoshiKong}} About a year ago, ''Wario Land 4'' was a poorly written article with more stubs, red links and missing info than you could poke a keyboard at! Slowly, but surely, the 20+ stubs were expanded, all red links and missing info filled, and every page in [[:Category:Wario Land 4|it's category]] cleaned up and rewritten. So come on, lets get this great article the featured status it deserves!
#{{User|SmartYoshi}}
#{{User|Pyro}}
#{{User|InvincibleZtar}}
#{{User|Mariobros1985}}
#{{user|Creeper}}

==== Oppose ====
#{{User|Vommack}} Per BLOF(For the time being, at least).
#{{User|Marshal Dan Troop}} The wording seems off in certain areas such as '''But with many strange occurrences, and even the disappearance of a group member, caused all future investigations of the Pyramid to be cancelled, and a newspaper article was published regarding the recent events.''' that sentence feels awkward to read and I think it requires another word at some point, also there are point of view problems such as ''' It comically reads; "STEAKS! EAT AS MUCH AS YOU CAN!!" The game ends with gold bars forming the words THE END.''' who is to say that, that is comical I mean I don't find it funny. There are also other problems with the article including inaccuracies.

==== Removal of Opposes ====

==== Comments ====
I suggest you proofread it before featuring it. There has been a ''ton'' of featured articles in the past that has no proofreading whatsoever done in any that errors had to be created beforehand. {{User|BabyLuigiOnFire}}

I haven't checked the article in-depth, but there are bits of POV ("[The game] enjoyed well-deserved praise") and odd writing ("The game got good reviews... [for] its general thrill of satisfaction" whaaaa?) in the intro. Not a good sign. --[[User:Glowsquid|Glowsquid]] ([[User talk:Glowsquid|talk]]) 08:44, 6 October 2012 (EDT)

:I wrote nearly the whole article, and I did try to be dilligent when it came to wording/grammar. I'll remove the point of view, but as far as I can see, there are none to very little errors in the rest of the article. {{User|YoshiKong}} 00:44, 8 October 2012 (EDT)
::You can't really see errors in your own work. It's nearly required to have someone else proofread it. {{User|BabyLuigiOnFire}}
:::Would you like to do that for me, blof? I'd really appreciate it. {{User|YoshiKong}}
::::I will if I have the time and the motivation. {{User|BabyLuigiOnFire}}

'''Update:''' I have since re-written the article on [http://www.mariowiki.com/index.php?title=Wario_Land_4&diff=1349998&oldid=1346203 three] [http://www.mariowiki.com/index.php?title=Wario_Land_4&diff=1351415&oldid=1349998 separate] [http://www.mariowiki.com/index.php?title=Wario_Land_4&diff=next&oldid=1351415 occasions]. I admit that I did find some silly mistakes and a few issues with the wording here and there. But as of now it has been thoroughly looked over, and I believe that the opposing arguments no longer apply. If there are any more concerns, please let me know and I'll tend to them as soon as possible. {{User|YoshiKong}}
*"[G]eneral thrill of satisfaction". It's improved, yes, but if mistakes that have been specifically brought up by Glowsquid-in the Intro paragraph, no less-haven't been fixed, I doubt it's ready for an FA.{{User|Vommack}}