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| |nominated=09:24, 28 September 2014 | | |nominated=09:24, 28 September 2014 |
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| #{{User|Time Turner}} Besides several sections lacking images, like the ''Advance'' series and the comics, there's some rather sketchy writing throughout the whole article. | | #{{User|Time Turner}} Besides several sections lacking images, like the ''Advance'' series and the comics, there's some rather sketchy writing throughout the whole article. |
| ##NSMBU: "When Mario enters his airship, Lemmy gets shocked once again (''when did the first time happen?''), but this time (''again, when was the other time?'') he does an even higher backflip (''compared to what?'') that makes him land perfectly on his ball in a tippy toe (''that amount of detail really isn't necessary'').
| | *NSMBU: "When Mario enters his airship, Lemmy gets shocked once again (''when did the first time happen?''), but this time (''again, when was the other time?'') he does an even higher backflip (''compared to what?'') that makes him land perfectly on his ball in a tippy toe (''that amount of detail really isn't necessary''). |
| ##SMB3: "Lemmy's debuts (''he appeared for the first time multiple times?'') in Super Mario Bros. 3, where he and the other Koopalings aid Bowser in his conquest of the various realms of the Mushroom World (''way too dramatic and flowery'')."
| | *SMB3: "Lemmy's debuts (''he appeared for the first time multiple times?'') in Super Mario Bros. 3, where he and the other Koopalings aid Bowser in his conquest of the various realms of the Mushroom World (''way too dramatic and flowery'')." |
| ##Description: "Lemmy has undergone a relative amount of changes (''relative to what?'') to his design over the course of his appearances (''and nothing much has changed besides his mohawk swapping colors every now and then'')."<br><br>These are only a few examples among many, and these spots of awkward, overly-dramatic, or simply bad writing are too common for me to accept this article getting featured.
| | *Description: "Lemmy has undergone a relative amount of changes (''relative to what?'') to his design over the course of his appearances (''and nothing much has changed besides his mohawk swapping colors every now and then'')." |
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| | These are only a few examples among many, and these spots of awkward, overly-dramatic, or simply bad writing are too common for me to accept this article getting featured. |
| #{{User|Randombob-omb4761}} This article lacks images (I most noticed the New Super Luigi U section) and it has a lot of citation tags. | | #{{User|Randombob-omb4761}} This article lacks images (I most noticed the New Super Luigi U section) and it has a lot of citation tags. |
| #{{User|Mario}} The writing isn't great. The grammar is not the best, with its egregious and incorrect use of semicolons. There is an unnecessary amount of detail in the New Super Mario Bros. U section; we don't need a full-on description of Lemmy's airship. The tense isn't consistent. The article states that Lemmy appears the most times (in the imprint, whatever that means), although it mentions only "The Buddy System". Second paragraph of Nintendo Adventure books is stringy, making it hard to follow. Super Mario Adventures comic needs more details. The physical appearance and development sections are padded, describing every little detail of him when it should be more of an analysis. We don't need a description on how many segments Lemmy has on his belly. General information section in general can use some work. So yeah, if you see my points, it's the writing itself that's keeping the article from being featured.
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| @Time Turner: Your bullets are breaking the coding for the numbers, I suggest you take those points to the comments section {{User:Baby Luigi/sig}} 20:55, 29 September 2014 (EDT) | | @Time Turner: Your bullets are breaking the coding for the numbers, I suggest you take those points to the comments section {{User:Baby Luigi/sig}} 20:55, 29 September 2014 (EDT) |
| :I reformatted it if that's okay. {{User:Mario/sig}} 20:57, 29 September 2014 (EDT)
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| ::Thank you for being more talented than me. {{User:Time Turner/sig}}
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| :::Oh, don't mention it. Don't worry, you're a great user, too. :) {{User:Mario/sig}} 21:15, 29 September 2014 (EDT)
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| I fixed some of the things there (the quotes that Time Turner pointed out and the physical appearance section) but Iggy Koopa777, you should be trying to fix up the article; this is your nomination after all. {{User:BabyLuigi64/sig}}
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| Sorry, i was distracted on other things (I wonder why when i do a Nomination, Proposal, etc. Everyone opposes or causes a chain reaction) {{user:Iggy Koopa777/sig}}
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| :Things that happen sometimes... if a nomination of any kind goes wrong I try to just forget about it. You have a lot of time to fix up the article if you want it featured {{User:Tsunami/sig}}
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| ::If everyone opposes your nomination, that means it has a legit problem with it. It's actually a ''good'' thing since it's part of a quality control process and it will help you be aware of the problems, therefore making you learn better what an article worthy of featuring is. {{User:Baby Luigi/sig}} 14:57, 5 October 2014 (EDT)
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| :::The same goes with proposals. If everyone opposes to your ideas, they have their faults too. You'd know why it's not a good idea. {{User:BabyLuigi64/sig}}
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